I look forward to the sunny days, warm nights, cool breeze, and small delights. A perfect San Diego summer. It's three months of excitement, A chance to hang out with your friends and venture on to new joyful things. Im excited, the summer is right around the corner, and I'm eager to get it started already. But, when it comes and as the summer nights calm, and the days pass by. We have no choice but to be thankful for the summer, and wait another energetic year...
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It's all true but during my summer it was kind of boring cuz me and my friends didn't have school so we couldn't talk about or plain about what we are going to do over the summer. But I still can't wait til summer.
Dylan,
I share your excitment over the summer. It is interesting, and a little surprising for me, that you don't present the end of summer as a bad thing, but rather as "an energenic year." It's a nice way of ending because it sounds hopeful, like great things will be accomplished when summer is over, but it is still sad that summer is ending.
Mr. J
You asked me how it can be improved. Other than for some minor grammatical problems I think it is an effective piece of writing, but you could go into more detail, like going into more detail about how those "sunny days" feel. Something like how the sun feels on your skin.
Mr. J
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